I don’t have a critique for this piece. I’m more familiar with Edgar Allan Poe’s style of writings. I myself have not written poetry in years.
What I did want to say was… good for you, jumping into the waters of the critique forum! 🙂 I know it was a struggle for you to post!
There are some excellent poets in here. Like John says, it’s a rough crowd. 🙂 So, remember that their critiques will be the best for you. To help you improve in your writing!
Once again, good job!