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barb schmeling
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teradactyl – 2009-03-22 10:41 PM If a word could describe me as a writer or poet generic would do better instead of the better brand name of it If a word could describe me in things accomplished or achieved procrastinator is what people would most likely first perceive If words could describe me as a leader or a follower push over is it because it fills the gap in leadership that’s hollow If words could describe me as a person people know to trust a toss up would fit well with me known sometimes as another one bites the dust If words could describe me in being a person loyal to another betrayed cheater explains events happened causing loyalty to smother If words could sum up a name for my personality best all around a big hearted dreamer would hold a tune on pitch that deaf toned ears could hear the sound * Need help on deciding whether the first line should stay the same by saying ” If a word could describe ” instead of alternating with ” If words could describe ” thus also changing the first word or words of the next line from being one word or two ? *

I like it Tera, it is very descriptive and to the point. I think I would use [if words] instead of [word].

Just my opinion. Either way I enjoyed the read and thought you did good. 🙂