Re: Re: Cyberstalker

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DCapone
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I think you should rename this poem “Cyber Bully” instead of Cyberstalker, since they are two different things. A lot of people cyberstalk (sad, but true) and it is for the most part harmless (I mean, when was the last time you checked on an ex’s myspace page?). Cyber-bullying is a much more direct attack.
As for technical stuff, I love the lines:

He tells the judge “I never intended for her
to kill herself. I was just kidding around.”

“Tell that to the mother” says the judge
“Who’s just put her daughter in the ground.”

The flow there is really great and it makes the words stand out even more. Nice poem.