Re: Re: Cancer, called Loneliness” / Revised 11/29/08

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paris1929
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I agree with the comments above and Elizabeth’s opinion about tightning it up I firmly agree in. When I first joined this site I too had words that just simply weren’t needed. I was like a child coloring a picture in a coloring book. I colored outside the lines but the direction and colors still made the picture look good, but when I started staying inside those lines it made the picture that much more perfect.

Good Job!
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