JohnOBX – 2009-03-22 5:38 PM
I’d cut the first section and start with the camping part. You have some lines that work really well and paint a picture of your father in very clear, minimalist strokes. Really like the one about holding up his hand and stopping the wind, though I didn’t follow you so much on the warts line.
3rd section is your strongest, by far.
I don’t eat fish, so I can’t comment on your recipie.
Thanks so much for taking the time to respond John. It might help to know this is a memory cookbook for my family, (not to be sold), so there are lines here-and-there, or whole sections for that matter, that most likely aren’t going to make sense to anyone else. That’s one reason I hesitated to put this one out here. I think I like that 3rd section best too; maybe I need to just take each one [section]and pretend it’s a story in it’s own right – would that help? I’ll try it.
By way of explanation re: the wart line – this is a characteristic of my father the whole family associates with him. He uses one of those old-timey-hoodoo-voodoo rituals to take away warts, and it works every time. He removed 12 warts from my sister’s hands when she was around 7-years-old.