Re: Re: Bait

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threeorchids
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Tera,

I like this. My favorite line is “I’m playing hide and go seek by myself and there is no one to find”. Gosh, I know that feeling some times. The lines have variable numbers of syllables so the flow is a bit off in places. Other than that, I think it is fine. Fine-tune it and cast it out.