Re: Re: Baby Shoes

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cypher
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Interesting beginning, ricky. It is a beginning, isn’t it? What is going to happen to those baby shoes? And, I would have thought, once the aunt knew the baby was a boy, she would ask for the pink bootees back so she could exchange them. But then I’m English and US customs might be different.
There were a couple of typos which I am sure you’ll see if you go through it again, and quite a bit of repetition, especially Bonzo ripping things off with his teeth but, other than that, I was amused by your story. Typical 10-year old behavior!
Can we see another excerpt, please? 🙂