Re: Re: Autumn’s Fall

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JudyJudyJudy
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personally, i’m not much for the olde english parts. i’d perhaps change the title, since there’s much more than autumn here. all in all, it’s not bad, but some words are better left out. example: “once more as in times before,”…”once more” implies that it has happened “in times before”. it’s not necessary to have both phrases in one line.