Re: Re: Autumn

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It’s good. Now, not to be nitpicky, but if you get rid of “the” in line two you will be able to paint an even clearer picture.
Autumn afternoon
____ gentle breeze kisses trees
soft leaf drifts away

What kind of gentle breeze? How did it feel? Cool? Crisp? Sweet?