Re: Re: 2 Minutes Till Summer

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Yes, I see the “boredom bouncing off the walls”. It is very active. I find this kind of twisted though–since we are now approaching fall. I like the first three stanzas best, but wish there were some other word to insert in stanza four and line two of the last since you used “boredom” in line one.