Re: Re: 2 Minutes Till Summer

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sdmoldrepair
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Hi Kristy!
What age group were you intending? I’d guess 4th grade+, since you use more complex vocab and descriptions.
I’d try omitting the second line of each verse & spicing up the first. Then the end when the kids can let loose will be more powerful. I like the first line, but this ‘We are free to do as our boredoms have done’ doesn’t quite work for me. To me, boredom is NOT being able to dance, flip, soar, sing, etc.
I like the subject–I go crazy if I have to wait too long for something! Good luck with this & thanks for posting! 🙂