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I know this needs torn to shreds because it is a first draft, and people will definitely catch something I can’t so. So, feel free to tear, tear, tear, and more tear!

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Dear (Insert Editor Name),

The Forest of Nuit is always bathed in night: a mysterious forest that harbors danger unbound to those desperately searching freedom. Enali, the last unicorn, finds herself in the Forest of Nuit, where she does what she can to evade Queen Madrik. She is seeking out Enali because Enali holds the elixir for her immortality, as the queen is an elderly woman and she has never been able to produce a suitable heir for the throne.

It takes one hundred unicorns to create a literal web of immortality, and Enali is that needed piece. But upon searching for freedom, Enali begins to question what it would mean to a solitary unicorn, until a dove named Straven drops onto her back and offers to help her revive the rest of her kind. However, Straven tells Enali that she must give up something valuable: herself.

Embroidered in Threaded Silk is complete at 1280 words, and the complete manuscript will be provided upon request. Thank you for considering Embroidered in Threaded Silk.

Sincerely,

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