Re: eh…maybe

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i think i’ve lost a bit of my writing edge. please be honest and critique the “you-know-what” out of this for me. thanks.

double dutch

jump in!
that’s easy for you to say.
this is my first try, and the ropes move too fast.
i’ve watched you;
feet tap-tapping the ground,
while i’m over here
perfectly frozen.
you’re jukin’ and jivin’,
turning flips and such;
expecting me
to do the same.
hold my hand;
slow down the ropes.
teach me your ways,
so i can follow.
be patient;
your game on the playground
is my double-dutch dilemma,
but i’ll try this thing
called life.