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Preface: I started this, but it doesn’t feel quite complete… Please let me know what you think…

Chicken Soup with Rice

Second grade –
Carol King and Maurice Sendak
fueled my imagination.

Smokey voice layered;
piano keys from the 70’s
always seem out of tune.

Songs about alligators,
chicken soup with rice,
and a stubborn Pierre.

Unabashed sentiments
vibrate with each note
echoing a thousand mistakes.

Years of mistakes
culminate as Rosie sings.
Eighteen unreversible benchmarks.