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Hooks

Postby MayaS » Mon Aug 21, 2017 1:38 pm

As a total newbie who's also not a native speaker, I have a love-hate connection with writing. I love to do it. I often hate what comes out from under my fingers.

I wouldn't dare share but a sentence of my first novel at this point, I'm still working on it, but I thought I can get some feedback on the hook that I'm supposed to use to lure agents in.

Anyhow, this is the ultra-short hook for my book:

Olivia Zaveri is a 23 year old girl who's never tried drugs. Not even pod.
Then she fell in love with a rockstar.

I'd also love to read some of your "hooks". The first sentences of your synopsis, a tweet that resonated with the industry, anything really short that worked or that you hope would work.

Thank you for your time. :)

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Re: Hooks

Postby wdarcy » Mon Aug 21, 2017 2:20 pm

Hi, Maya.

I believe you mean '"pot" rather than 'pod." And because you begin your hook in present tense (as queries should, so good for you!), I would keep the last sentence in present tense also: "Then she falls in love with a rockstar."

Yes, that seems like a good hook for a query. It wouldn't draw me in, but that's just because I'm not interested in rockstars or the drug scene. But those who are might well want to read further.

Here is the opening of my current novel, which I am presently editing:

Julia Conroy did a double take as Natalie drew a gun from her handbag. Had their colleague actually brought a firearm to a faculty meeting?

Good luck on the novel, Maia!

--Warren
"Wagner's 'Das Rheingold'" (Oxford 1993). Winner of the Society for Music Theory's Wallace Berry Award, 1995.

"Elements of Sonata Theory" co-authored with James Hepokoski(Oxford 2006). Winner of the Society for Music Theory's Wallace Berry Award, 2008.

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Re: Hooks

Postby mike m. » Mon Aug 21, 2017 4:16 pm

[quote="MayaS"]As a total newbie who's also not a native speaker, I have a love-hate connection with writing. I love to do it. I often hate what comes out from under my fingers.

I wouldn't dare share but a sentence of my first novel at this point, I'm still working on it, but I thought I can get some feedback on the hook that I'm supposed to use to lure agents in.

Anyhow, this is the ultra-short hook for my book:

Olivia Zaveri is a 23 year old girl who's never tried drugs. Not even pod.
Then she fell in love with a rockstar.

I'd also love to read some of your "hooks". The first sentences of your synopsis, a tweet that resonated with the industry, anything really short that worked or that you hope would work.

Thank you for your time. :)[/quote]
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it is hard writing english. harder if its a second language.

in english i think the word you want for drugs is pot as in weed or many other words as shown below:

3750 Marijuana and crack rolled in a joint
420 Marijuana use
51 Combination of crack cocaine with marijuana or tobacco
A-bomb Marijuana cigarette with heroin or opium
Acapulco gold Marijuana from S.W. Mexico; marijuana
Acapulco red Marijuana
Ace Marijuana cigarette; PCP
Afgani indica Marijuana
African Marijuana
African black Marijuana
African bush Marijuana
African woodbine Marijuana cigarette
Airhead Marijuana user
Airplane Marijuana
Alice B. Toklas Marijuana brownie
Amp Amphetamine; marijuana dipped in formaldehyde or embalming fluid, sometimes laced with PCP and smoked
Amp joint Marijuana cigarette laced with some form of narcotic
Angola Marijuana
Are you anywhere? Do you use marijuana?
Ashes Marijuana
Assassin of Youth Marijuana
Astro turf Marijuana
Atom bomb Marijuana mixed with heroin
poop unicorns and rainbows Marijuana
Aunt Mary Marijuana
B Amount of marijuana to fill a matchbox
B-40 Cigar laced with marijuana and dipped in malt liquor
Baby Marijuana
Baby bhang Marijuana
Babysitter Marijuana
Bad seed Marijuana combined with peyote; heroin
Bag Container for drugs; a package of drugs, usually marijuana or heroin; a person’s favorite drug
Baker Person who smokes marijuana
Bale Marijuana
Bamba Marijuana
Bambalacha Marijuana
Bammies A poor quality of marijuana
Bammy Marijuana
Banano Marijuana or tobacco cigarettes laced with cocaine
Bar Marijuana
Bash Marijuana
Basuco (Spanish) Cocaine; Coca paste residue sprinkled on regular or marijuna cigarette
Bazooka Cocaine; combination of crack and marijuana; crack and tobacco combined in a joint; coca paste and marijuana
BC bud Marijuana from British Columbia; synonymous with any high-grade marijuana from Canada
Beedies Cigarettes from India (resemble marijuana joints/vehicle for other drugs)
Belyando spruce Marijuana
Bhang Marijuana, Indian term
Bite one’s lips To smoke marijuana
Black Marijuana; opium; methamphetamine
Black bart Marijuana
Black ganga Marijuana resin
Black gold High potency marijuana
Black gungi Marijuana from India
Black gunion Marijuana
Black mo/black moat Highly potent marijuana
Black mote Marijuana mixed with honey
Black rock Crack Cocaine
Blanket Marijuana cigarette
Blast Cocaine; Smoke crack; Marijuana; smoke marijuana or crack
Blast a joint To smoke marijuana
Blast a roach To smoke marijuana
Blast a stick To smoke marijuana
Blaxing Smoking marijuana
Blazing Smoking marijuana
Block Marijuana
Blonde Marijuana
Blow Cocaine; to inhale cocaine; to smoke marijuana; to inject heroin
Blow a stick To smoke marijuana
Blow one’s roof To smoke marijuana
Blowing smoke Marijuana
Blue de hue Marijuana from Vietnam
Blue sage Marijuana
Blue sky blond High potency marijuna from Colombia
Blunt Marijuana inside a cigar; cocaine and marijuana inside a cigar
Bo Marijuana
Bo-bo Marijuana
Bobo bush Marijuana
Bogart a joint Salivate on a marijuana cigarette; refuse to share
Bohd Marijuana; PCP
Bomb Crack; heroin; large marijuana cigarette; high potency heroin
Bomber Marijuana cigarette
Bone Marijuana; $50 piece of crack; high purity heroin
Bong Pipe used to smoke marijuana
Boo Marijuana; methamphetamine
Boo boo bama Marijuana
Boom Marijuana
Boot the gong To smoke marijuana
Brick Crack Cocaine; cocaine; marijuana; 1 kilogram of marijuana
Broccoli Marijuana
Brown Marijuana; heroin; methamphetamine
Bubble gum Cocaine; crack cocaine; marijuana from Tennessee
Bud Marijuana
Buda Marijuana; a high-grade marijuana joint filled with crack
Buddha Potent marijuana spiked with opium
Bullyon Marijuana
Burn one To smoke marijuana
Burnie Marijuana
Bush Marijuana; cocaine; PCP
Butter Marijuana; crack
Butter flower Marijuana
C.S. Marijuana
Cam trip High potency marijuana
Cambodian red/Cam red Marijuana from Cambodia
Can Marijuana; 1 ounce
Canade Heroin/marijuana combination
Canadian black Marijuana
Canamo Marijuana
Canappa Marijuana
Cancelled stick Marijuana cigarette
Candy blunt Blunts dipped in cough syrup
Candy sticks Marijuana cigarettes laced with powdered cocaine
Cannabis tea Marijuana
Carmabis Marijuana
Cartucho (Spanish) Package of marijuana cigarettes
Catnip Marijuana cigarette
Caviar Combination of cocaine and marijuana; Crack Cocaine
Cavite all star Marijuana
Cest Marijuana
Champagne Combination of cocaine and marijuana
Charas Marijuana from India
Charge Marijuana
Chase To smoke cocaine; to smoke marijuana
Cheeba Marijuana
Cheeo Marijuana
Chemo Marijuana
Chiba chiba High potency marijuana from Colombia
Chicago black Marijuana, term from Chicago
Chicago green Marijuana
Chiefing To smoke marijuana
Chillum An object used to smoke opium, hashish, and marijuana
Chips Tobacco or marijuana cigarettes laced with PCP
Chira Marijuana
Chocolate Marijuana; opium; amphetamine
Chocolate Thai Marijuana
Christmas bud Marijuana
Christmas tree Marijuana; amphetamine; methamphetamine; depressant
Chronic Marijuana; marijuana mixed with crack
Chunky Marijuana
Churus Marijuana
Citrol High potency marijuana, from Nepal
Clam bake Sitting inside a car or other small, enclosed space and smoking marijuana
Clicker Crack mixed with PCP; marijuana dipped in formaldehyde and smoked
Clickums A marijuana cigarette laced with PCP.
Climb Marijuana cigarette
Cochornis Marijuana
Cocktail Combination of crack and marijuana; cigarette laced with cocaine or crack; partially smoked marijuana cigarette inserted in regular cigarette; to smoke cocaine in a cigarette
Cocoa puff To smoke cocaine and marijuana
Colas Marijuana
Coli Marijuana
Coliflor tostao (Spanish) Marijuana
Colombian Marijuana
Colorado cocktail Marijuana
Columbus black Marijuana
Cosa (Spanish) Marijuana
Crack back Marijuana and crack
Crack bash Combination of crack cocaine and marijuana
Crazy weed Marijuana
Cripple Marijuana cigarette
Crying weed Marijuana
Cryppie Marijuana
Cryptonie Marijuana
Cubes Marijuana tablets; crack cocaine
Culican High potency marijuana from Mexico
Dagga Marijuana from South Africa
Dank Marijuana; the practice of lacing cigarettes with formaldehyde
Dawamesk Marijuana
Dew Marijuana
Diablito (Spanish) Combination of crack cocaine and marijuana in a joint
Diambista Marijuana
Dimba Marijuana from West Africa
Ding Marijuana
Dinkie dow Marijuana
Dipped joints Marijuana combined with PCP and formaldehyde
Dips Marijuana joints dipped in PCP (phencyclidine)
Dirt grass Inferior quality marijuana
Dirties Marijuana cigarettes with powder cocaine added to them
Dirty joints Combination of crack cocaine and marijuana
Ditch Marijuana
Ditch weed Inferior quality marijuana
Djamba Marijuana
Do a joint Marijuana
Dody Marijuana
Domestic Locally grown marijuana
Don jem Marijuana
Don Juan Marijuana
Dona Juana (Spanish) Marijuana
Dona Juanita (Spanish) Marijuana
Donk Marijuana/PCP combination
Doob Marijuana
Doobee Marijuana
Doobie/dubbe/duby Marijuana
Dope Marijuana; heroin; any other drug
Dope smoke To smoke marijuana
Doradilla Marijuana
Draf Marijuana; ecstasy, with cocaine
Draf weed Marijuana
Drag weed Marijuana
Dry high Marijuana
Dube Marijuana
Duby Marijuana
Durong Marijuana
Duros (Spanish) Marijuana
Dust Marijuana mixed with various chemicals; cocaine; heroin; PCP
Dust blunt Marijuana/PCP combination
Dusting Adding PCP, heroin, or another drug to marijuana; Using inhalants
Earth Marijuana cigarette
El diablito (Spanish) Cocaine, marijuana, heroin and PCP
El diablo (Spanish) Cocaine, marijuana and heroin
El Gallo (“rooster”) Marijuana
Elephant Marijuana; PCP
Endo Marijuana
Esra Marijuana
Fallbrook redhair Marijuana, term from Fallbrook, CA
Fatty Marijuana cigarette
Feed bag Container for marijuana
Feeling Marijuana
Fiend Someone who smokes marijuana alone
Fine stuff Marijuana
Finger Marijuana cigarette
Finger lid Marijuana
Fir Marijuana
Fire it up To smoke marijuana
Firewood Marijuana
Flower Marijuana Slang
Flower tops Marijuana Slang
Fly Mexican airlines To smoke marijuana
Fraho/frajo Marijuana
Frios (Spanish) Marijuana laced with PCP
Fry Marijuana cigarettes dipped in embalming fluid, sometimes also laced with PCP; Crack Cocaine
Fry daddy Crack and marijuana; cigarette laced with crack; marijuana joint laced with crack
Fry sticks Marijuana cigarettes dipped in embalming fluid, sometimes also laced with PCP
Fu Marijuana
Fuel Marijuana mixed with insecticides; PCP
Fuma D’Angola (Portugese) Marijuana
Gage/gauge Marijuana
Gange Marijuana
Gangster Marijuana; person who uses or manufactures methamphetamine
Ganja Marijuana; term from Jamaica
Ganoobies State of being stoned and laughing uncontrollably
Garbage Inferior quality marijuana; low quality heroin
Gash Marijuana
Gasper Marijuana cigarette
Gasper stick Marijuana cigarette
Gauge butt Marijuana
Geek Crack mixed with marijuana
Geek-joints Cigarettes or cigars filled with tobacco and crack; a marijuana cigarette laced with crack or powdered cocaine
Get a gage up To smoke marijuana
Get high To smoke marijuana
Get the wind To smoke marijuana
Ghana Marijuana
Giggle smoke Marijuana
Giggle weed Marijuana
Gimmie Crack and marijuana; marijuana joint laced with crack
Go loco To smoke marijuana
Goblet of jam Marijuana
Gold Marijuana; Crack Cocaine; heroin
Gold star Marijuana
Golden Marijuana
Golden leaf Very high quality marijuana
Gong Marijuana; opium
Gonj Marijuana
Good butt Marijuana cigarette
Good giggles Marijuana
Good stuff High potency drug, especially marijuana
Goody-goody Marijuana
Goof butt Marijuana cigarette
Gorge Marijuana
Grass Marijuana
Grass brownies Marijuana
Grasshopper Marijuana
Grata Marijuana
Greek Combination of marijuana and powder cocaine
Green Inferior quality marijuana; ketamine; PCP
Green buds Marijuana
Green goddess Marijuana
Greens Marijuana
Greeter Marijuana
Gremmies Combination of cocaine and marijuana
Greta Marijuana
Griefo Marijuana
Griefs Marijuana
Grifa (Spanish) Marijuana
Griff Marijuana
Griffa Marijuana
Griffo Marijuana
Grow(s) Marijuana growing operations (indoor and outdoor)
Gunga Marijuana
Gungeon Marijuana
Gungun Marijuana
Gunja Marijuana
Gyve Marijuana cigarette
Haircut Marijuana
Hanhich Marijuana
Happy cigarette Marijuana cigarette
Happy stick Marijuana and PCP combination
Harsh Marijuana
Has Marijuana
Hawaiian Very high potency marijuana
Hawaiian Black Marijuana
Hawaiian homegrown hay Marijuana
Hay Marijuana
Hay butt Marijuana cigarette
Herb Marijuana
Herb and Al Marijuana and alcohol
Herba Marijuana
Hit To smoke marijuana; marijuana cigarette; Crack Cocaine
Hit the hay To smoke marijuana
Hocus Marijuana; opium
Homegrown Marijuana
Honey blunts Marijuana cigars sealed with honey
Hooch Marijuana
Hooter Cocaine; marijuana
Hot stick Marijuana cigarette
Hydro Amphetamine; high quality methamphetamine; marijuana; methylenedioxymethamphetamine (MDMA); marijuana grown in water (hydroponic)
Hydrogrows Indoor marijuana growing operations
Illies Marijuana dipped in PCP
Illing Marijuana dipped in PCP
Illy Marijuana cigarettes soaked in embalming fluid and dried
Indian boy Marijuana
Indian hay Marijuana from India
Indian hemp Marijuana
Indica Species of cannabis, found in hot climate, grows 3.5 to 4 feet
Indo Marijuana term from Northern CA
Indonesian bud Marijuana; opium
Instaga Marijuana
Instagu Marijuana
J Marijuana cigarette
Jamaican gold Marijuana
Jamaican red hair Marijuana
Jane Marijuana
Jay Marijuana cigarette
Jay smoke Marijuana
Jefferson airplane Used match cut in half to hold a partially smoked marijuana cigarette
Jim Jones Marijuana laced with cocaine and PCP
Jive Marijuana; heroin; drugs
Jive stick Marijuana
Joint Marijuana cigarette
Jolly green Marijuana
Joy smoke Marijuana
Joy stick Marijuana cigarette; marijuana and PCP combination
Ju-ju Marijuana cigarette
Juan Valdez (Spanish) Marijuana
Juanita (Spanish) Marijuana
Juice joint Marijuana cigarette sprinkled with crack
Juja Marijuana
Jumbos Large vials of crack sold on the streets; marijuana mixed with crack
K2/Spice Olive-colored plant material sold as incense laced with synthetic cannabinoid mimicking compounds (most notably HU-210 and JWH-018)
Kabak Marijuana; Turkish marijuana
Kaff Very potent marijuana from Morocco, Lebanon and other Arab/Middle Eastern countries
Kalakit Marijuana
Kali Marijuana
Kansas Grass Marijuana
Kate bush Marijuana
Kawaii electric Marijuana
Kaya Marijuana
KB Marijuana
Kee Marijuana
Kentucky blue Marijuana
Key Marijuana
KGB (killer green bud) Marijuana
Khayf Very potent marijuana from Morocco, Lebanon and other Arab/Middle Eastern countries
Ki Marijuana
Kick stick Marijuana cigarette
Kief Very potent marijuana from Morocco, Lebanon and other Arab/Middle Eastern countries
Kiff Marijuana cigarette; very potent marijuana from Morocco, Lebanon and other Arab/Middle Eastern countries
Killer Marijuana; PCP
Killer green bud Marijuana
Killer weed Marijuana
Killer weed (1980’s) Marijuana and PCP
Kilter Marijuana
Kind Marijuana
Kind bud High quality marijuana
King bud Marijuana
Kona gold Marijuana
Krippy Marijuana
Kryptonite Crack cocaine; marijuana
Kumba Marijuana
Kush Marijuana
L.L. Marijuana
Lace Cocaine and marijuana
Lakbay diva Marijuana
Laughing grass Marijuana
Laughing weed Marijuana
Leaf Cocaine; Marijuana
Leak Marijuana/PCP combination
Leno (Spanish) Marijuana
LG (Lime Green) Marijuana
Lid 1 ounce of marijuana
Light stuff Marijuana
Lima Marijuana
Liprimo Marijuana and crack rolled in a joint
Little smoke Marijuana; LSD; psilocybin/psilocin
Llesca Marijuana
Loaf Marijuana
Lobo Marijuana
Loco (Spanish) Marijuana
Loco Weed (Spanish) Marijuana
Locoweed Marijuana
Log Marijuana cigarette; PCP
Loose shank Marijuana
Love boat Marijuana dipped in formaldehyde; PCP; blunts mixed with marijuana and heroin; blunts mixed with marijuana and PCP
Love leaf Marijuana/PCP combination
Love weed Marijuana
Loveboat PCP; combination of PCP and marijuana
Lovelies Marijuana laced with PCP
Lubage Marijuana
M Marijuana; morphine
M.J. Marijuana
M.O. Marijuana
M.U. Marijuana
Macaroni Marijuana
Macaroni and Cheese $5 pack of marijuana and a dime bag of cocaine
Machinery Marijuana
Macon Marijuana
Maconha Marijuana
Mafu (Spanish) Marijuana
Magic smoke Marijuana
Manhattan silver Marijuana
Mari Marijuana cigarette
Marimba (Spanish) Marijuana
Mary Marijuana
Mary and Johnny Marijuana
Mary Ann Marijuana
Mary Jane Marijuana
Mary Jonas Marijuana
Mary Warner Marijuana
Mary Weaver Marijuana
Matchbox 1/4 ounce of marijuana or 6 marijuana cigarettes
Maui wauie Marijuana from Hawaii
Maui-wowie Marijuana; methamphetamine
Meg Marijuana
Megg Marijuana cigarette
Meggie Marijuana
Messorole Marijuana
Mexican brown Marijuana; heroin
Mexican green Marijuana
Mexican locoweed Marijuana
Mexican red Marijuana
Mighty mezz Marijuana cigarette
Mo Marijuana; powder cocaine
Modams Marijuana
Mohasky Marijuana
Mohasty Marijuana
Monte Marijuana from South America
Mooca/moocah Marijuana
Mooster Marijuana
Moota/mutah Marijuana
Mooters Marijuana cigarette
Mootie Marijuana
Mootos Marijuana
Mor a grifa Marijuana
Mota/moto (Spanish) Marijuana
Mother Marijuana
Mow the grass To smoke marijuana
Mu Marijuana
Muggie Marijuana
Muggle Marijuana
Muggles Marijuana
Muta Marijuana
Mutha Marijuana
Nail Marijuana cigarette
Nigra Marijuana
Northern lights Marijuana from Canada
Number Marijuana cigarette
O.J. Marijuana
Oolies Marijuana cigarettes laced with crack
Ozone Marijuana, PCP and crack cigarette; marijuana cigarette; PCP
P-dogs Combination of cocaine and marijuana
P.R. Panama Red
Pack Marijuana; heroin
Pack a bowl Marijuana
Pack of rocks Marijuana cigarette
Pakaloco Marijuana (“crazy tobacco”)
Pakalolo Marijuana
Pakistani black Marijuana
Panama cut Marijuana
Panama gold Marijuana
Panama red Marijuana
Panatella Large marijuana cigarette
Paper blunts Marijuana within a paper casing rather than a tobacco leaf casing
Parsley Marijuana combined with PCP
Pasto (Spanish) Marijuana
Pat Marijuana
Philly blunts Marijuana
Pin Marijuana
Pipe Crack pipe; marijuana pipe; vein into which a drug is injected; mix drugs with other substances
Pocket rocket Marijuana; marijuana cigarette
Pod Marijuana
Poke Marijuana; to smoke marijuana
Pot Marijuana
Potlikker Marijuana
Potten bush Marijuana
Premos Marijuana joints laced with crack cocaine
Prescription Marijuana cigarette
Pretendica Marijuana
Pretendo Marijuana
Primo Crack; marijuana mixed with cocaine; crack and heroin; heroin, cocaine and tobacco
Primo square A marijuana joint laced with crack
Primo turbo Combination of crack cocaine and marijuana
Puff the dragon To smoke marijuana
Purple haze LSD; crack cocaine; marijuana
Queen Ann’s lace Marijuana
Ragweed Inferior quality marijuana; heroin
Railroad weed Marijuana
Rainy day woman Marijuana
Rangood Marijuana grown wild
Rasta weed Marijuana
Red bud Marijuana
Red cross Marijuana
Red dirt Marijuana
Reefer Marijuana
Reefers Marijuana cigarette
Righteous bush Marijuana
Rip Marijuana
Roach Butt of marijuana cigarette
Roach clip Holds partially smoked marijuana cigarette
Roacha Marijuana
Roasting Smoking marijuana
Rockets Marijuana cigarette
Rompums Marijuana with horse tranquilizers
Root Marijuana
Rope Marijuana; rohypnol
Rose marie Marijuana
Rough stuff Marijuana
Rubia (Spanish) Marijuana
Ruderalis Species of cannabis, found in Russia, grows 1 to 2.5 feet
Rugs Marijuana
Salad Marijuana
Salt and pepper Marijuana
Sandwich bag $40 bag of marijuana
Santa Marta (Spanish) Marijuana
Sasfras Marijuana
Sativa Species of cannabis, found in cool, damp climate, grows up to 18 feet
Schwagg Marijuana
Scissors Marijuana
Scrub Marijuana
Seeds Marijuana
Sen Marijuana
Sess Marijuana
Sezz Marijuana
Shake Marijuana; powder cocaine
Sherman stick Crack cocaine combined with marijuana in a blunt
Shotgun Inhaling marijuana smoke forced into one’s mouth by another’s exhaling
Siddi Marijuana
Sinse (Spanish) Marijuana
Sinsemilla Potent variety marijuana
Skunk Marijuana; heroin
Skunkweed Marijuana
Smoke Marijuana; Crack Cocaine; heroin and crack
Smoke a bowl Marijuana
Smoke Canada Marijuana
Snop Marijuana
Spark it up To smoke marijuana
Speedboat Marijuana, PCP, and crack combined and smoked
Spice/K2 Olive-colored plant material sold as incense laced with synthetic cannabinoid mimicking compounds (most notably HU-210 and JWH-018)
Spliff Large marijuana cigarette
Splim Marijuana
Splitting Rolling marijuana and cocaine into a single joint
Square mackerel Marijuana, term from Florida
Squirrel Combination of PCP and marijuana, sprinkled with cocaine and smoked; marijuana, PCP, and crack combined and smoked; LSD
Stack Marijuana
Stems Marijuana
Stick Marijuana; PCP
Sticky icky Marijuana
Stink weed Marijuana
Stoney weed Marijuana
Straw Marijuana cigarette
Sugar weed Marijuana
Super grass PCP; marijuana with PCP; marijuana
Super pot Marijuana
Swag Marijuana
Sweet Lucy Marijuana
Swishers Cigars in which tobacco is replaced with marijuana
Syrup Combination of marijuana and cough syrup
T Cocaine; Marijuana
Taima Marijuana
Takkouri Marijuana
Tea Marijuana; PCP
Tea Party To smoke marijuana
Tex-mex Marijuana
Texas pot Marijuana
Texas tea Marijuana
Thai sticks Bundles of marijuana soaked in hashish oil; marijuana buds bound on short sections of bamboo
Thirteen Marijuana
Thirty-eight Crack sprinkled on marijuana
Thumb Marijuana
Tin Container for marijuana
Tio Cocaine-laced marijuana cigarette
Toke To inhale cocaine; to smoke marijuana; marijuana
Toke up To smoke marijuana
Torch Marijuana
Torch up To smoke marijuana
Torpedo Marijuana and crack
Trauma Marijuana
Tray $3 bag of marijuana
Trees Marijuana
Triple A Marijuana from British Columbia
Trupence bag Marijuana
Turbo Marijuana and crack
Tustin Marijuana
Twist Marijuana cigarette
Twistum Marijuana cigarette
Unotque Marijuana
Up against the stem Addicted to smoking marijuana
Vega A cigar wrapping refilled with marijuana
Viper Marijuana smoker
Viper’s weed Marijuana
Wac PCP on marijuana
Wacky weed Marijuana
Wake and Bake Marijuana
Water Blunts; methamphetamine; PCP; a mixture of marijuana and other substances within a cigar; Gamma hydroxybutyrate (GHB)
Water-water Marijuana cigarettes dipped in embalming fluid, sometimes also laced with PCP
Weed Marijuana; PCP
Weed tea Marijuana
Wet Blunts mixed with marijuana and PCP; methamphetamine; marijuana cigarettes soaked in PCP (“embalming fluid”) and dried
Wet daddies Marijuana joints that are dipped in formaldehyde, often mixed with PCP
Wet sticks Marijuana combined with PCP and formaldehyde
Whack Crack Cocaine; heroin and PCP; Crack/PCP mixture or marijuana laced with insecticides
Whackatabacky Marijuana Slang
Wheat Marijuana Slang
White Russian Marijuana Slang
White-haired lady Marijuana Slang
Wicky Combination of powder cocaine, PCP and marijuana
Wicky stick PCP, marijuana, and crack
Wollie Rocks of crack rolled into a marijuana cigarette or in a cigar
Woo blunts Marijuana; marijuana combined with cocaine
Woola blunt Marijuana and heroin combination
Woolah Hollowed out cigar refilled with marijuana and crack
Woolas Cigarettes laced with cocaine; crack sprinkled on marijuana cigarette
Woolie Marijuana and heroin combination; marijuana and crack cocaine combination
Woolie blunt Combination of crack cocaine and marijuana slang
Woolies Marijuana and crack or PCP
Wooly blunts Marijuana and crack or PCP
Wooties Crack smoked in marijuana joints
X Marijuana; amphetamine; methylenedioxymethamphetamine (MDMA)
Yeh Marijuana slang
Yellow submarine Marijuana slang
Yen pop Marijuana
Yeola Marijuana and crack
Yerba (Spanish) Marijuana
Yerba mala (Spanish) PCP and marijuana
Yerhia Marijuana
Yesca Marijuana
Yesco Marijuana
Zacatecas purple Marijuana from Mexico
Zambi Marijuana
Zay A mixture of marijuana and other substances within a cigar; blunts
Zig Zag man Marijuana; LSD; marijuana rolling papers
Zol Marijuana cigarette
Zooie Holds butt of marijuana cigarette
Zoom Marijuana laced with PCP; PCP

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Re: Hooks

Postby mike m. » Mon Aug 21, 2017 4:18 pm

[quote="wdarcy"]Hi, Maya.

I believe you mean '"pot" rather than 'pod." And because you begin your hook in present tense (as queries should, so good for you!), I would keep the last sentence in present tense also: "Then she falls in love with a rockstar."

Yes, that seems like a good hook for a query. It wouldn't draw me in, but that's just because I'm not interested in rockstars or the drug scene. But those who are might well want to read further.

Here is the opening of my current novel, which I am presently editing:

Julia Conroy did a double take as Natalie drew a gun from her handbag. Had their colleague actually brought a firearm to a faculty meeting?

Good luck on the novel, Maia!

--Warren[/quote]
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0kay

the way it was , with fell, sounds better to my ear

why would some grammarian object to that tense usage

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Re: Hooks

Postby mike m. » Mon Aug 21, 2017 4:21 pm

[quote="MayaS"]As a total newbie who's also not a native speaker, I have a love-hate connection with writing. I love to do it. I often hate what comes out from under my fingers.

I wouldn't dare share but a sentence of my first novel at this point, I'm still working on it, but I thought I can get some feedback on the hook that I'm supposed to use to lure agents in.

Anyhow, this is the ultra-short hook for my book:

Olivia Zaveri is a 23 year old girl who's never tried drugs. Not even pod.
Then she fell in love with a rockstar.

I'd also love to read some of your "hooks". The first sentences of your synopsis, a tweet that resonated with the industry, anything really short that worked or that you hope would work.

Thank you for your time. :)[/quote]

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(its a long story and hard to explain why but)
i really like the title
turn left at krispy kreme

now i need to find a story that would fit

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Re: Hooks

Postby MayaS » Mon Aug 21, 2017 11:44 pm

Hey,

Gosh, I'm so embarrassed that I didn't double check my post before posting it. The pod/pot error must have been an autocorrect. I can't believe I did this, from all the words that I'd misspell over poor English...

Anyway, Mike, this title is awesome. I do this too sometimes, I like a single line or story and wonder what would be happening around it. Let me know if you come up with something.

Oh, and another question for you, would you suggest I keep the last sentence of the hook as is (with fell) or change it to avoid agents being like "Nope, poor grammar skills"?

Thank you!

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Re: Hooks

Postby rob-lost » Tue Aug 22, 2017 8:36 am

I had a story rise out of "Never survive the apocalypse."
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Re: Hooks

Postby mike m. » Tue Aug 22, 2017 11:10 am

[quote="MayaS"]Hey,

Gosh, I'm so embarrassed that I didn't double check my post before posting it. The pod/pot error must have been an autocorrect. I can't believe I did this, from all the words that I'd misspell over poor English...

Anyway, Mike, this title is awesome. I do this too sometimes, I like a single line or story and wonder what would be happening around it. Let me know if you come up with something.

Oh, and another question for you, would you suggest I keep the last sentence of the hook as is (with fell) or change it to avoid agents being like "Nope, poor grammar skills"?

Thank you![/quote]
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to my ear fell sounds correct
you might want to poll more readers or
you might want to double check with some grammar programs to see what they say

i am wondering if this is some regional quirk in the way people talk
eg
some people say in line others say on line
both mean waiting to be served like at a box office selling tickets

agents wont care about a few minor errors in grammar
that is what editors are for

you try to be as good as you can be
but perfection is not possible
if you have a lot of them then that would be a big problem to getting an agent or publisher

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Re: Hooks

Postby wdarcy » Tue Aug 22, 2017 11:58 am

Maya, it has nothing to do with poor grammar. It has everything to do with what agents want and expect. And what they expect is that query letters and synopses will be written in present tense throughout.

Now personally I loathe present tense. I refuse to read a novel written in present tense. I find it pretentious, distancing, and distracting. But that's just me. And when it comes to querying agents, it's best to give them what they want and expect. Remember: agents are so overworked that they are looking for an excuse to delete your query. Don't give it to them!

When you finish your query, post it in the query forum of the critique section and ask for a critique. There is also a thread of successful queries (including some of mine), queries that resulted in requests for manuscripts. You might find them helpful. There is a fairly rigid format for query letters, and you should follow it.

Good luck!

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Re: Hooks

Postby wdarcy » Tue Aug 22, 2017 12:00 pm

[quote="rob-lost"]I had a story rise out of "Never survive the apocalypse."[/quote]

One of my published stories is titled "First Do No Harm." It's about a female psycho surgeon who kidnaps a man and forces him to amputate parts of his own body. Sensitive parts.

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