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First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Thu May 04, 2017 1:59 pm
by laura_jayne_15
Hi everyone!

My ebook is now on amazon and I've had one review and it wasn't a great one :( Would appreciate any feedback anyone could give!

https://www.amazon.co.uk/gp/aw/d/B071NH ... ref=plSrch

Re: First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Thu May 04, 2017 3:55 pm
by ostarella
Are you looking for more reviews or actual feedback? I ask because feedback is what you want before you publish, not after, unless you're thinking of revising and re-publishing - which is something I personally find irritating (as in, why should I buy a book that wasn't ready to publish and now I have to buy it again and/or re-read it to see what's changed?). If you want feedback, ask for it as "what I can learn for my next book". In the meantime, read the reviews, see if there are things that make sense, and also use those for your next book.

Re: First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Fri May 05, 2017 6:43 am
by laura_jayne_15
Sorry, to clarify, this book is done done. I've had it beta read and edited and the story is complete and won't be changing.

The review I've had says my story and structure is good but it needs editing grammatically/punctuation wise but to be honest, me and 3 others have been over it with a fine tooth comb and can't find the errors this person speaks of :(

Re: First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Fri May 05, 2017 8:08 am
by ostarella
Not to pick on you, but perhaps it's errors like using "me" instead of "I"? ;)

(btw - I used your url and couldn't make head nor tail out of the site - had to google the ASIN to find the book with the "look inside" and the review.)

Now, again, not to pick on you, but in just the first two paragraphs I immediately noticed the following:

"domino-like" versus "domino like" (plus I'm not really sure what a domino-like house looks like ;) )

"It was longer" refers, grammatically, to the wind, not the hair.

"occupying the chair" makes it confusing - which chair and where exactly was it (since the table was set for two and the MC was sitting there with Prior)?

Now, most times I would say one review shouldn't throw everything off-kilter, but if I could find these things with a quick glance, I'm thinking perhaps you need different people looking for this stuff.

Re: First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Fri May 05, 2017 10:10 am
by laura_jayne_15
Sorry, just realised I've put the Co.UK link here as I'm based in the UK. I'm also wondering if my writing style is different because of that...

Re: First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Fri May 05, 2017 10:50 am
by ostarella
Well, I've beta'd for a couple of Brits and I haven't noticed a style difference. Some terminology, for sure, but otherwise, no...

Re: First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Fri May 05, 2017 11:32 am
by laura_jayne_15
Obviously just my poor writing skills then!

Re: First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Fri May 05, 2017 11:40 am
by ostarella
I wouldn't call them "poor" - but a little more polishing would help in the future. I don't know if you did this, but I've found reading it out loud can pick up a lot of cumbersome/confusing phrasing, etc.

Re: First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Sun May 07, 2017 3:16 am
by laura_jayne_15
Free on amazon UK until midnight.

Re: First book on amazon! Would love some feedback :)

PostPosted: Mon May 08, 2017 8:17 am
by robjvargas