How do you know?

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Billie Bowman Daddario
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How do you know?

Postby Billie Bowman Daddario » Sun May 25, 2014 3:27 pm

How do you know when you have taken a poem as far as you can?

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Re: How do you know?

Postby Storylover02 » Sun May 25, 2014 3:59 pm

I think you should first ask yourself if the poem has effectively told the story you want it to tell. Then make sure that there is enough detail that the reader does not have to leave anything to the imagination. You probably already knew that but those are the questions I ask myself before deciding a poem is finished.

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Re: How do you know?

Postby Billie Bowman Daddario » Tue May 27, 2014 5:26 pm

Thanks for your reply. I write about moments. Literally a moment in time. So my poems are short. I have never really known what to ask in order to put it into words, am I finished. I just kinda feel finished, but my poems are short, so I was wondering if I was missing something.
Billie

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Re: How do you know?

Postby Storylover02 » Wed May 28, 2014 8:39 pm

You can squeeze a lot of detail in a single moment, not that there's anything wrong with short poems. In fact I think short poems are best because I think there is a point where a poem gets so long it may as well be prose. I had to read Native Guard for a class. It's a great poem that tells a great story but it was like 7 long!!! Short poems can tell a good story with great detail without losing the reader. Just go till you think it's good!

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Re: How do you know?

Postby Billie Bowman Daddario » Sat Jun 07, 2014 6:56 pm

Hey, thanks for your feedback. I'm kinda new this, I think the more I do it the more confident and comfortable I'll be in my own work Practice and good editing make perfect.

Billie :P

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Re: How do you know?

Postby Storylover02 » Sun Jun 08, 2014 4:20 pm

Anytime!! I just got into poetry a few months ago and am not that confident about it yet. That's why everyone suggested I try this site. It's great to have your work looked at and to look at others' to provide examples!

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Re: How do you know?

Postby Billie Bowman Daddario » Mon Jun 09, 2014 4:32 pm

Here is my latest attempt. I'd love to hear what you think.

Zen and Dirty Dishes

The dog outside the window smears the glass.
And the sink is full of proof that I exist.
The messiness of life is all around me and I revel in it.

Tidiness is for the old ladies that knit their lives by patterns.
A life to full of what is now, not yet past.
Untidy lovers leaving scars on the furniture,

Children screaming and laughing leaving toys to be stepped on and broken.
Weeds in the garden where I started to plant a bleeding heart. The flower dead.
Folded laundry on the table undone almost.

This is life. This is the day. The hour. The second.
I am enamored, breathing in the possibility of joy.
Content with questions, only God Knows.

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Re: How do you know?

Postby AmericanSamuri » Fri Sep 12, 2014 8:08 pm

The way to Know is simple:
HAS YOUR HEART AND SOUL BLEED FOR IT?
IF SO IT IS A PART OF YOU
MANY POEMS CAN NEVER BE COMPLETED FOR IT TAKES A LITTLE MORE.
YOUR HEART MUST RELAX AND YOUR SOUL MUST GLIDE IN REJOICE AT IT.
YOU WILL KNOW AND DEEP WITHIN, YOU WILL SAY:
IT IS DONE.
YET ONLY A FEW WILL YOU SAY:
IT IS GOOD
AND PERHAPS ONE DAY YOU WILL SAY FOR ONLY ONE:
THIS IS MY HEART AND SOUL IT IS DONE, IT IS GOOD, THERE IS NO MORE.
WHEN YOU FEEL THIS YOU WILL BE AT PEACE.


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