Misguided Intention

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Misguided Intention

Postby FishJunkie » Mon Mar 10, 2014 3:19 am

[b][b]Depictions of peace paint truth in midst of self perceived chaos,
Lies absent of scarcity Awaken dissonant ambiguities,
Tyrants rule supreme in absence of uniform,
Disappearance of order,
Imposed impressions of self expressing speculations,
Insecure,Left in doubt,
Assuring confidence,
Once having been had,
Misappropriated by factual ignorance,
The sun without shadow,
Rebellious masquerader’s in mind, of mine,
Governed by rulers of such states,
Sought internal implications of construed disassociation's,
Conceptual realism's,
Drowning minds sight,
Seers of incessant distresses.
Sour tones twisted,
Noting fruitless intentions,
Knees bound to the ground,
Certainly arrow pointed wishes,
Intentional praise for such redemption's insisted.

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Re: Misguided Intention

Postby Storylover02 » Tue Jun 03, 2014 8:58 pm

No offense intended, but I have no idea what is going on here. You have a great vocabulary, but it's getting in the way of whatever the message is. Maybe try to simplify it so the message is more clear.

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Re: Misguided Intention

Postby Billie Bowman Daddario » Mon Jun 09, 2014 4:49 pm

I really like the vocabulary and I really wanted to get into this, but I couldn't find the message. What's your story here? I think you have an important point to make, but I can't find it. I hope you will keep working on this one and share it again.

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