Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Iain » Mon May 05, 2008 6:10 am

Just a girlish dream...


She dreamt as young girls do,
of tall, dark, handsome.
Of happy ever after
and she was so pretty
cute, bubbly, fun.
She never imagined
it would be hard to find.
She dreamt of a better job,
a place of her own:
her domain, hers to rule
over and to judge who might enter.
Happy still but searching.
Longing for the one.
The one Day, the one Man.
The one moment when it would all
be like a dream.
Her sweet dream.
Taking longer than she had hoped
was a trial, a pain
that would not leave.
He came, he broke her heart.
Not once but twice;
and came again and swore to change.
The warnings ringing out like
steeple'd bells from sister, friend,
mother, all scared for her poor heart.
Still, change there was and happiness
at last filled the void that had been
work, housework, shopping, lonely
pizzas and crying by herself in the dark.
Still one dream, one longing evaded her
grasp; surely now ‘twould come!
But pills and tests and tests and pills
And potions and relaxation therapy will not
bring fulfilment yet to the one dream she has held
so close, oh! so very close inside:
Motherhood!
And with each miscarriage a part of her dies
along with her unknown child
and the dream is tattered, as though clawed at by the Lions
that inspire her art. She hopes, she fears
but now in despair
she barely dares
to dream.

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby lildelta » Mon May 05, 2008 7:27 am

The Final Dream

Lying in his cozy bed he knew the end was near
The dream he had the night before was disturbing and quite clear

Life could have been so different if I'd changed the way I lived
If I had only listened and learned early to forgive

With sadness in his heart he thinks of others that have passed
How happy they had seemed to be with no worries of their past

As their lives come to a close their loved ones hovered near
Giving comfort to their weary souls their destination clear

Slowly he surveys the dark and quiet little room
A stark contrast, his final hours alone and full of gloom

No one there to comfort him, no praises to be given
The wages of years of solitary living

With a sigh he closes his sad brown eyes and begins living his final dream
A solitary wondering soul with no destination seen

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Rox » Mon May 05, 2008 8:24 am

Patti- Thanks! Sometimes it's that whole "A dream to some; a nightmare to others" thing that rings most frighteningly true. And I completely relate to yours; our half black lab/half rhodesian ridgeback does exactly the same thing....

Interesting poems, everyone! Keep going!

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby pwilliamswriter » Mon May 05, 2008 6:26 pm

Drea - wow. You shine.


Patti Wiliams

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Jolanta » Tue May 06, 2008 3:49 am

I agree with Patti. Wow.

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Lorraine Hart » Tue May 06, 2008 5:32 am

My adult daughter suffers from chronic Lyme disease...this was a true ER experience...and dream...

Six Wolves Lay

Six wolves lay round my bed
She said when finally the meds
Let her come back to me,
Six wolves lay in protective
Spread watching, she said.

She smiled with hand to chest,
Here, she whispered, here’s
Where Grampa lay watching me,
I could feel the weight of his
Great grey head and five others
On the bed, she said to me.

We’re letting her sleep, said the nurse,
Head bobbing in her own agreement
Till I wrestled her eyes still,
Till I made her understand this was
How my daughter’s seizures presented,
Snarling,
Someone better move their ass!
I wrapped leather around her fingers
Grampa’s pouch in her hand, there
Resting upon her chest.

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Lorraine Hart » Tue May 06, 2008 5:51 am

Thanks for the prompt Jackbug!

Jolanta..."and that begrudged monster/was still at bay"...powerful ending lines.

Patti...awww sweet poopers...loved "Lucy's Dreams"...t'was the wine put in the apostrophe!

Rox...so creepily right on! I've met this woman...sigh.

Iain...bro' ( I really do have a bro' named Ian)...you made me teary..."but now in despair/she barely dares/to dream." sigh.

Lildelta..."The Final Dream"...that was a good, hard read.

Drea...great message! Did you mean "temporary" or "temporarily" in that last line?

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby jackbugs » Tue May 06, 2008 4:36 pm

Lorraine, that is a stunning poem - well done!

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Jolanta » Tue May 06, 2008 10:58 pm

yes Lorraine, that poem gave me shivers. fantastic.

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Lorraine Hart » Wed May 07, 2008 3:32 pm

Merci bien mes amies!

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