Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

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Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

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Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby jackbugs » Sun May 04, 2008 8:34 am

One of my most successful poems of the last year or so was written as an elegy for my dying father-in-law, as a I tried to imagine what his last dream would be like. Sounds depressing, but it was actually uplifting and got a good response from friends and family. So I thought that might be a good prompt: Write a poem about a dream you imagine someone else might have. It could be about a relative or close friend, or even someone you don't know personally, like a famous person. (You can even include "daydream" in the definition of "dream" if you prefer.) Make it serious or funny, it's up to you. Good luck!

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Jolanta » Sun May 04, 2008 4:00 pm

She dreams of better days
Of younger days
Of days when she was happier
She dreams of times when she felt loved
Felt wanted
Didn't strive for attnetion
She watches him sit there
Mumbling quietly to himself
Scowling at all he sees
She dreams of days when she
Was happier
Of when she had her choice
And wasn't forced to endure.
She dreams of her one true love
Coming back and sweeping her
She dreams of a time when she was happy
When she was with him
And that begrudged monster
Was still at bay.

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby pwilliamswriter » Sun May 04, 2008 5:50 pm

Jolanta - I enjoyed your poem very much - and felt it and knew it - good job. I wish I'd written it myself. My gosh... highest praise to you.

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby pwilliamswriter » Sun May 04, 2008 5:51 pm

I should have said from Patti Williams - I keep forgetting that part!

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby pwilliamswriter » Sun May 04, 2008 6:02 pm

Lucy's Dream's

She sleeps
I know because I watch
her little legs move,
then run,
go back and forth.
she's chasing life that's for sure,
with love.
Her mouth smacks
eating it up
but it's all good, it's all peace,
it's all love,
running inside her doggy dreams.

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Rox » Sun May 04, 2008 6:29 pm

Trapped

She remembers being controlled
no choices, no happiness,
married because it was right,
a child because it was an accident,
and she dreams…

Dreams of control, manipulation,
how to bring people to her
for sympathy, for attention
(good or bad, it doesn’t matter);
to evoke guilt or duty -
to feel something,
anything

Because she doesn’t know how to dream
of escape
of freedom
of ruling her own life
instead of trying to rule others.

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby Jolanta » Sun May 04, 2008 7:59 pm

Thank you for your praise, it really boosts my self esteem :)

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby pwilliamswriter » Mon May 05, 2008 5:46 am

Rox - I'm not saying this just to say it - great poem. It hit home a bit. And those are the best kind. I wrote the one I posted after a couple of glasses of wine - I woke up hoping it wasn't too bad! Sometimes the poet should not push the submit button until morning!

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Re: Writing Prompt: Someone Else's Dream

Postby pwilliamswriter » Mon May 05, 2008 5:47 am

Once again, sorry, the above post is from Patti!

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