Short story critique needed

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Anya Kylash
 
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Re: Short story critique needed

Postby Anya Kylash » Mon Dec 17, 2012 8:13 pm

Okay, it's well written but hard to read through. You need to double space it when you move it from MS word. Also, don't you think they would have tried to tell her this before? Or is she finally becoming sane and she's finally remembering? Or does she forget five minutes after she's told? I found that a sort of plot hole, but I liked how it was written.
Finished:
Race Against Fate -101k words
Loyalties Lost -121k words
Forgotten -100k words
Friends and Foes -113k words

Unfinished:
Alone - 32k words

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Anya Kylash
 
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Re: Short story critique needed

Postby Anya Kylash » Tue Dec 18, 2012 11:32 am

No problem. :)
Finished:
Race Against Fate -101k words
Loyalties Lost -121k words
Forgotten -100k words
Friends and Foes -113k words

Unfinished:
Alone - 32k words


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