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Re: Direct Speech

PostPosted: Tue Oct 31, 2017 10:20 pm
by Dreaming Imrryr
wdarcy wrote:
> Yes, avoid those adverbs in dialogue tags, or you'll create
> "Swifties" (named after the series of boys' books about Tom
> Swift, which are replete with them). "I feel warm," she said
> heatedly. "Come on, let's go faster!" he said quickly. That
> sort of thing.
>
> Something I learned from Steven James: In writing dialogue tags, avoid the
> "ing" and "as" syndrome.
>
> "I don't understand this," he said, scratching his head. Or:
> "I don't understand this," he said, as he scratched his head.
>
> Instead write this:
>
> He scratched his head. "I don't understand this."
>
> According to Steven, the syndrome is distracting and sophomoric, and it's
> the default choice of too many writers.
>
> --Warren

Now I kind of want to read some Tom Swift stories. :)