Slipping out of 3rd person?

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Slipping out of 3rd person?

Postby jackitaylor » Tue Sep 05, 2017 3:11 pm

I'm wondering about the use of the word "you", in 3rd person narration, used in a general way, like saying "You never know what you'll get", is that slipping out of tense or is it acceptable used that way. In my current story, the narration is referring to the old elevator in the MC's apartment building, that it had been known to suddenly stop, between floors, "and there you would stay, until the building superintendent showed up", would that be a problem with tense or acceptable used that way?

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Re: Slipping out of 3rd person?

Postby pls » Tue Sep 05, 2017 4:07 pm

As long as the statement comes from your 3rd-person narrator, and the rest of the story is in 3rd person, no problem. Think about it - what would your story be like if you excised all 1st- and 2nd-person pronouns from it?
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Re: Slipping out of 3rd person?

Postby wdarcy » Tue Sep 05, 2017 5:54 pm

I agree with Paul. Your use of second person is absolutely fine here.

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Re: Slipping out of 3rd person?

Postby Noizchild » Tue Sep 05, 2017 6:46 pm

I've never tried to write in second-person before.
You ask me what I thought about
Before we were lovers.
The answer is easy.
Before I met you
I didn't have anything to think about.

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