is the way scenes are organized so as to provide a clear beginning,
middle, and end to a story. For the Potter series, both individual
books and the series as a whole demonstrate a mastery of story
For one thing, the Potter stories are strongly
sequential. While we do get a few flashbacks here and there (via the
Pensieve and Riddle’s Diary), we certainly don’t get very many.
None of the stories has a Prelude that shows us events from the middle or near the end of a book. While
Preludes are a useful mechanism, beginning writers seem to use them
excessively, perhaps hoping to make up for a weak first chapter.
do the stories bounce us around within the timeline of the story. Even
Book 3, Prisoner of Azkaban, uses its time travel device in a
controlled manner, so that the linear, sequential feel of the storyline
is never compromised.
The school calendar also provides a
natural structure to each story. While this scaffolding becomes an
obstruction in the later books, still we have to acknowledge that all
of the books (but most especially the early ones) benefit from
connecting key plot events to calendar events. Each book begins at or
near Harry’s birthday, during the transition from summer vacation to
the start of the school year. Plot intensity ratchets up on key dates
such as Halloween, allowing each book to reach a solid middle point
during the winter holidays. From there, events move to their inexorable
close at or about finals week.
Not every story can have something as congenial as a school calendar to leverage, but many novels seem not to have any sort of grounding schedule at all. As a result, readers begin to wonder, “Is this story going somewhere? Or will it just continue to flop around aimlessly?”
Potter series uses the school calendar to emphasize the beginning,
middle, and end of each story. As a result, events feel more connected,
heightening the reader’s sense of, “The shinbone is connected to the
thighbone, The thighbone is connected to the hipbone.” Another way of
saying this is that the school calendar helps to telegraph the
structure of the story, but without giving away any surprises.
telegraphed structure tells readers “This story is heading somewhere,”
without producing a sense of, “Oh, I know exactly where this is going.”
As such, the school calendar is a win-win solution, with but a single caveat: that it might get overused.
Potter series as a whole also has a clear structure, one that readers
are at least subliminally aware of. We don’t know exactly what will
happen, but as we read, we have a sense that each book is right for its
place in the series. In Book 3, Prisoner of Azkaban, Voldemort’s return
becomes imminent. In Book 4, Goblet of Fire, his return is realized. In
Book 5, Order of the Phoenix, he manipulates events from the shadows.
In Book 6, Half-Blood Prince, he steps out into the open.
unlike many series, the books of the Potter series aren’t basically
interchangeable. Books 1 and 2 form a clear beginning. Books 3 through
6 steadily escalate the conflict, while Book 7 brings the series to its
For readers, this all feels right and correct,
without feeling predictable. This is because the series manages to
telegraph its structure without telegraphing the plot.
Finding the Beginning
the beginning of a story is probably the most difficult task for a
writer, as far as story structure is concerned. Consider Book 1 of the
Potter series, Philosopher’s Stone, which starts shortly after the
death of Harry’s parents and the disembodiment of Lord Voldemort. Is
this the true beginning of the story? It seems so.
omitting the first chapter of Book 1. This would leave readers in the
dark as to Harry’s true nature, so that the torments he suffers at the
Dursleys’ wouldn’t mean as much. Moreover, readers would be wondering
not just “what is going to happen next,” but “what is this all about?”
Some readers are more patient than others, but by revealing Harry’s
true nature up front, along with his connection to the mysterious
wizarding world, Book 1 caters to even those of us who have limited
patience for directionless, “try to guess what I’m thinking now” prose.
Harry’s experiences at the Dursley home are important to our
understanding of him as a person. They let us become attached to him,
and give us insight into what kind of person he is. Thus, to start Book
1 with Harry boarding the Hogwarts Express wouldn’t cut it. Yes,
boarding the train is a powerful moment, and it marks the spot where
the book really takes off. But the train scenes would lose much of
their significance if we were strangers to Harry, having only just met
In sum, it seems unwise (or at least fruitless) to try and start Book 1 at a later time in the narrative.
it start earlier? In this case, not very easily. The opening of Book 1
could certainly be jazzed up, by exchanging its current focus on Vernon
Dursley with something more Harry-specific, such as his being retrieved
from Godric’s Hollow by Dumbledore and Hagrid. But to start the book
with Harry’s parents still alive would be a mistake. Readers would be
introduced to two people who immediately get killed. If Book 1 were
meant to be primarily a horror story, such an approach might be
appropriate, but even so, it would introduce a BEGIN … END … BEGIN
quality to the very start of the book—and some readers might be put
off, never getting past that second BEGIN.
Finding the right
place to begin a story can be a thorny problem, but Book 1 makes the
perfect choice, however difficult. It resists the urge to start with
Harry’s parents still alive, though this means giving up an emotionally
powerful scene, with Lily sacrificing herself to save Harry; as a
result, Book 1 avoids adding a false start quality to the narrative.
book also resists the urge to skip forward and start with Harry living
at the Dursley home, even though the current first chapter gives away
important information regarding Harry’s identity and the true nature of
the world he lives in. (An insistence on secrecy at all costs—a
fanatical devotion to surprise—would have left out Chapter 1, and would
have made the opening of Book 1 feel pointless to many readers.)
1 also resists the urge to start with Harry boarding the Hogwarts
Express, giving up an energetic, in medias res opening, in favor of a
more linear storyline that increases the feeling of
beginning-middle-end in the book as a whole, and allows for a
suspenseful buildup toward a powerful Bright Moment in the first
quarter of the book.
Middle and End
With a beginning
solidly in place, middle and end become a question of alertness. So
long as the writer has a story to tell, and is telling that story, they
need only ask themselves at regular intervals:
“When was the last time the plot moved forward? When was the last time the intensity ratcheted up?”
a long work such as a novel, the pace and intensity will naturally rise
and fall, and subplots will occasionally take center stage. But so long
as the writer remains alert, such things present no danger. Quidditch,
romance, friendship, hobbies, and even day-to-day events can all play
their part. Only when ancillary events derail the plot for long
stretches, or subvert the plot entirely, only then do they become a
Particularly in the early books, the Potter series
demonstrates a mastery of interweaving subplot with plot. The first
Quidditch game is more than an action sequence, as it introduces a
threat to Harry’s life. Chess games in front of the Gryffindor
fireplace become significant later when the Big Three are trying to
reaching the chamber where the philosopher’s stone is hidden. Harry’s
parselmouth ability makes his life difficult in the near term,
ratcheting up the conflict, and it later becomes essential to the plot,
as it allows him to open the Chamber of Secrets.
commercial fiction, scenes often too fail to advance the story, making
a novel feel like it is spinning its wheels or driving around
aimlessly. By contrast, the Potter series is constantly moving forward,
with readers convinced that the direction of movement makes perfect
sense, no matter how surprising a development might be.
Because individual scenes clearly serve the story, readers are left eager for more.
Next in series: Premise vs. Story
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