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Successful Queries: Agent Catherine Drayton and “The Liar Society”

Categories: Children's Writing, Chuck Sambuchino's Guide to Literary Agents Blog, Successful Queries.

This series is called “Successful Queries” and I’m posting actual query letters that succeeded in getting writers signed with agents. In addition to posting the actual query letter, we will also get to hear thoughts from the agent as to why the letter worked. 

The 48th installment in this series is with agent Catherine Drayton (Inkwell Management) and her authors, Lisa and Laura Roecker, for their forthcoming YA novel, The Liar Society (Sourcebooks Fire, March 1, 2011).

 

Dear Ms. Drayton,

Kate Lowry didn’t think dead best friends could send e-mails. Not even on the anniversary of their disappearance. Of course, that was before this message from Grace appeared in her inbox:

Kate,
I’m here…
sort of.
Find Christian.
He knows.
I shouldn’t be writing.
Don’t tell.
They’ll hurt you.

Most girls would ignore the warning and go straight to the police.

But Kate isn’t most girls.

Instead, she decides to channel Nancy Drew, pearls and all. Of course, Kate’s pearls are faux, her skirts are way shorter and she’d take everyone’s favorite teen detective in a girl fight, but you get the idea.

The e-mails continue and Kate’s quest to solve the mystery takes a dangerous turn when her confrontation with Christian, Grace’s addict brother, almost gets her killed. Good thing she finds a couple of knights-in-(not so)-shining armor in sexy bad boy, Liam, and her awkward neighbor, Seth. Armed with her newfound sidekicks, the investigation continues, uncovering a secret lurking in the halls of their elite private school that threatens to destroy them all.

Kate knew finding Grace wasn’t going to be easy, but figuring out who to trust is more difficult than she ever could have imagined.

After all, everyone’s a suspect.

We are sisters-turned-writing-partners. THE LIAR SOCIETY is a 53,000 word YA Mystery. We have pasted the first chapter below for your consideration. Upon your request, we are prepared to submit the complete manuscript. We look forward to hearing from you.

Lisa and Laura Roecker

Commentary from Catherine:

As an agent I have made a practice of reading all my own query letters. After thirteen years in the business, you can quickly recognize a writer with potential. Lisa and Laura’s query leaped the first hurdle as they had formatted their query in the correct mannerit simply makes queries easier to read and  shows the author has done their research about the industry.

The opening paragraph is dramatic and the reader is immediately drawn into the mystery. Their short, clipped sentences are carefully chosen and show an understanding of creating suspense. It is clear from the query letter that Kate is a strong character with attitude. They haven’t complicated the query letter with too many plot points but focused on the protagonist and her sidekicks. They also exhibited an ability to write in a voice appropriate for a teenage girl. I liked the ironic Nancy Drew reference as it showed they had thought about where their novel would fit in the marketplace and I knew that at the time a number of editors had expressed an interest in mysteries.

I was happy to read a sample in the body of the e-mail and found their website enormously persuasive. It showed creativity and imaginationLisa and Laura looked like they’d be great to work with which has proved correct!

This post is an online exclusive complement
to a spotlight on Lisa & Laura in a forthcoming
issue of WD. If you don’t have a sub to
Writer’s Digest, what are you waiting for?
Get one now!

 

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3 Responses to Successful Queries: Agent Catherine Drayton and “The Liar Society”

  1. Vince Stead says:

    I really liked your article. My name is Vince Stead, and I wrote a kid’s book called "The Back Yard Kids Club" that you can find as a book at regular price, or as a digital download for only $2.99, and great for kids to learn how to download it to a device. You can see the link to Barnes & Noble or Amazon here:

    http://search.barnesandnoble.com/The-Back-Yard-Kids-Club/Vince-Stead/e/2940012713155/?itm=2&USRI=vince+stead

  2. Thanks for having us Chuck! The book has changed quite a bit since we wrote that query, but I love that Kate’s voice still rings true. Also amazing is that Catherine reads all her own queries! I swear the woman doesn’t sleep….

  3. Kristan says:

    "I liked the ironic Nancy Drew reference as it showed they had thought about where their novel would fit in the marketplace…"

    Me too! It was kind of a sly way of saying, "This book is Nancy Drew meets Heist Society" or "Fans of Nancy Drew will enjoy this book too." And the email-within-the-query is really what hooked me.

    Sounds like a great read, and I enjoyed Catherine’s commentary. I’m hoping to query her again in a few weeks, so this is helpful. :)

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